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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles* between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. * vehicles that use both fuel and electricity

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles* between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. * vehicles that use both fuel and electricity
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The chart illustrates the annual number of
sales
of
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in
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 Japan,
US
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the US
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 and other countries, It includes vehicles that are
fuel based
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fuel-based
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 or electric from the
year
 2006
onwards
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apply
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to 2009. In general, US
sales
 are the most significant of the other two categories, It seems to
peak
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have peaked
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 in the
year
 2007,
while
japan
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Japan
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sales
 peaked in 2008 and a gradual rise in the
sales
 of other countries was observed in 2009. In the initial years, US
sales
 were set at 250,000 which increased to 350,000 in the
year
 2007,
however
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however,
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 the
sales
expereince
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experienced
 a downfall from 2007 onwards and stayed a little over the numbers
acheived
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achieved
in
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at
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the
year
. Japan
demonsterates
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demonstrates
demonstrated
 a steady rise in
the
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apply
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sales
 from 2006 of 50,00 till 2008 ,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 in
2009
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2009,
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 there
is
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was
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 a stark rise in
the
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apply
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sales
. Other companies
also
 show a gradual increase over the years,
however
in contrast
 it is not that significant, other than the
year
 2009, where the
differenace
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difference
differences
 between the three
categorise
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categories
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 is the least .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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