The charts below show the changes in ownweshio of electrical aooliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownweshio of electrical aooliances and amount of time spent doing housework and households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The chart illustrates the
differances
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differences
difference
that
occurs
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in the ownership of electrical
applances
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appliances
in regards to the number of households
useing
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using
the
iteams
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items
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from 1920 to 2019. In general, of all the electrical appliances given, the refrigerator was bought the most significantly by a complete 100
percentage
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of the households.
However
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washing
machine
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machines
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catches
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caught
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up with
this
advancement around the year 2000 and
have
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a
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parallel sales with refrigerators. In the case of refrigerators, there is a steep
escalations
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of people buying the appliance from
a
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an
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O to 100
percent
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per cent
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from the year 1920 to 2019.
In
addition
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addition,
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we
also
observe, the sales become constant from the year 2000.
Vaccum
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Vacuum
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cleaner
also
shows a vertical elevation in the number of ownerships, starting from 30
household
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households
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in the early years and expanding to
a
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100 in the later years.
In contrast
to
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the Washing
a Washing
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machine, the growth noted in the other two categories have been significant
wherase
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whereas
where
in the case of washing machine, the number of
houshold
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households
household
have
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has
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increased to a little over
than
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70.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • appliances
  • household
  • reduction
  • efficiency
  • technological advancements
  • convenience
  • socio-economic factors
  • urbanization
  • disposable income
  • gender roles
  • environmental impact
  • sustainability
  • energy consumption
  • time allocation
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