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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extend do you agree/ disagree with this option?

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I agree that a person's worth nowadays seems to be judged
according to
 social status and material possessions. But I account that old-fashioned values,
such
 as honor, kindness and trust important too. Nowadays we get a lot of information from the Internet. Often we try to get
first
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 impression about
people
 using Instagram, Facebook and other sources.
Persons
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 publish their best
fotos
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photos
 from expensive and famous places like
five-stars
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 hotels, Mishlens restaurants,
theaters
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theatres
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,
trips
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and trips
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,
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. But we
undastand
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understand
 that
this
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this person
these people
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people
 try to show higher social status and material possessions than they have. When we
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this
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this person
these people
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people
 in real life nutshell go away and we
undastand
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understand
 that we have
busines
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business
 with simple
people
. And old-fashioned values became more important
then
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 social status and material possessions. How we can trust him? Will be she kind
this
 my child? How
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much
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 can I
belive
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believe
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 him? In conclusion, I would like to say that old-fashioned values are important nowadays too.
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