People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily lives. What are the main problems and how can these problems be tackled?
Ordinary
life of people who live in megapolises normally includes some problems Add an article
The ordinary
such
as queues in different social and medical facilities or enormous prices
for accommodation. However
, there are many ways to solve these issues which I will discuss in this
essay.
Citizens of cosmopolitan towns usually face problem
of queues at the main social infrastructures. Add an article
the problem
a problem
For instance
, it is considered that spending around 2-3 hours in order to visit a doctor is a normal situation. Similarly
, if we talk about kindergardens
and schools, they require to stand in a “line” immediately after Correct your spelling
kindergarteners
child’s
birth. One of the possible methods to tackle Correct article usage
a child’s
this
issue is to create more facilities or renovate and reconstruct existed
infrastructure. These actions not only could help to reduce queuesWrong verb form
existing
,
but Remove the comma
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also
will give equal opportunities of
getting medical help and education for everybody.
The second problem regards to Change preposition
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cost
of living, especially, Add an article
the cost
accommodation’s
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accommodation
prices
. In spite of upward
trend in Correct article usage
the upward
a
construction area, the Correct article usage
the
prices
have been growing year to year. As a result
, the majority of individuals can not afford themselves
to buy a house or a flat in a megacity, hereby they pay rent Correct pronoun usage
apply
over
their whole Change preposition
for
life
. In order to solve Fix the agreement mistake
lives
this
problem, the government might establish the
social programs which will stimulate the local building companies to decrease Correct article usage
apply
prices
or encourage people to buy their own apartments, using mortgage
and other features.
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mortgages
To conclude
, there are many problems people from big cities usually face. These issues might be tackled using distinct approaches, depends
on the area where they occur.Wrong verb form
depending
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task response
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