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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily lives. What are the main problems and how can these problems be tackled?

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Ordinary
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 life of people who live in megapolises normally includes some problems
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 as queues in different social and medical facilities or enormous
prices
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 for accommodation.
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, there are many ways to solve these issues which I will discuss in
this
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 essay. Citizens of cosmopolitan towns usually face
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the problem
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 of queues at the main social infrastructures.
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, it is considered that spending around 2-3 hours in order to visit a doctor is a normal situation.
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, if we talk about
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kindergarteners
 and schools, they require to stand in a “line” immediately after
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a child’s
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 birth. One of the possible methods to tackle
this
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 issue is to create more facilities or renovate and reconstruct
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 infrastructure. These actions not only could help to reduce queues
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 but
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 will give equal opportunities
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 getting medical help and education for everybody. The second problem regards to
cost
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the cost
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 of living, especially,
accommodation’s
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prices
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. In spite of
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the upward
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 trend in
a
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 construction area, the
prices
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 have been growing year to year.
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, the majority of individuals can not afford
themselves
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to buy a house or a flat in a megacity, hereby they pay rent
over
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for
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 their whole
life
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. In order to solve
this
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 problem, the government might establish
the
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social programs which will stimulate the local building companies to decrease
prices
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 or encourage people to buy their own apartments, using
mortgage
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mortgages
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 and other features.
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, there are many problems people from big cities usually face. These issues might be tackled using distinct approaches,
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 on the area where they occur.

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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the question prompt. In this essay, you have discussed the problems faced by people in large cities, but you haven't provided strategies to tackle these problems. Remember to provide a clear and complete response to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Overall, your essay has a logical structure. However, in the second paragraph, you can improve the coherence by using transition words or phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.
lexical resource
Your lexical resource is appropriate for the essay. You have used a range of vocabulary to express your ideas. However, there are a few instances where you could have used more precise and academic vocabulary.
grammatical range
Your grammatical range is generally good. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward sentence constructions throughout the essay. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and the use of articles.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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