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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The graphs depict the value in
Australian
 dollars of
Australian
trade
, with China, Japan and the United States, between 2004 and 2009. There are three charts illustrating
exports
 and
imports
 in billions of
Australian
 dollars, one chart for each country.
Overall
,
Australian's
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Australia's
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imports
 are greater
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than then
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then
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the
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exports
with
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of
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 all
counries
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countries
, except
with
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apply
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Japan,
which
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whose
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exports
 are greater than
imports
. Analysing Australia's
trade
 with China,
exports
 and
imports
 had an
increasing
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increase
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since
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from
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 2004 to 2009, The
imports
 were above
exports
 until
middle
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the middle
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 of 2008, when
exports
 became higher than
imports
. Concerning
Australian's
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Australia's
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trade
 with Japan,
imports
 and
exports
 were
at
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apply
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the same amount in 2004,
whereas
exports
 had
a increasing
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increased
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 during
this
 period, achieving the double of
imports
 in 2008, when
exports
had a decreasing
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decreased
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,
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apply
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 but
keeping
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remained
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 higher than
imports
. About
trade
 with the United States,
Australian
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Australians
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 bought more than
it
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they
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 sold. Both,
imports
 and
exports
 had the same
behavior
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behaviour
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, rising a little since the
beggining
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beginning
 and
then
 falling near 2008.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, trade, exports, imports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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