IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#instant #noodles #summaries #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The diagram below illustrates how instant
noodles
Use synonyms
 are produced. It can be observed , that
whole
Correct article usage
the whole
show examples
 process takes 8 stages and requires special
manufacture
Replace the word
manufacturing
show examples
 conditions to be finished.
First
Change the article
The first
show examples
 step is transporting flour from storage silos to the
manufacture
Replace the word
manufacturer
show examples
. After that mixer stirs it with oil and water and that mixture goes through rollers to become dough sheets .
On
Change preposition
In
show examples
 the fourth stage special machine slits dough until strip condition and produces
noodles
Use synonyms
 discs. The next step of that process is cooking
noodles
Use synonyms
 disks with oil and drying them . The
last
Linking Words
 but one stage is packaging cooked noodle disks
to
Change preposition
into
show examples
 the cups and adding vegetables and specific spices. And in
final
Correct article usage
the final
show examples
 step cups with instant
noodles
Use synonyms
 go through
machine
Add an article
the machine
a machine
show examples
 with label paper and they are ready for sealing and sale.
Submitted by tyulyubayeva.ayaulym on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Add more linking words.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
What to do next:
Look at other essays: