The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates how hydroelectric power
station
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stations
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generate electricity.
Overall
, it generated electricity by letting the
water
flow through the
generator
during
at
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apply
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the
day time
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daytime
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, and pumped the
water
up at
the
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night time.
First,
the dam
kept
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the
water
from the river at
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
, and
at
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in
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the
day time
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daytime
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the
water
from
dam
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the dam
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flow
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flows
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to the
generator
to generate
the
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eletricity
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electricity
.
Then
the electricity that has been generated
go
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throgh
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through
the power lines to the national grid. Meanwhile, the
water
that went through the
generator
came to the lower-level
reservoir
.
Lastly
, at night, the
water
in the lower-level
reservoir
pumped
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up by the reversible turbines under the
generator
and
went
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back to the high-level
reservoir
through the intake that
located
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in
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at
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the bottom of the dam.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, generator, reservoir with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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