Some people believe that public celebrations like national days and festivals are a waste of money. They are of the opinion that people should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree? Support your arguments with examples from your own experience.

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Most societies say that public bashes
such
as national days and
events
cost a lot of
money
. Whilst, some
people
think that citizens should be wiser in using their
money
. From my perspective, I believe celebrating these important
events
is the most pragmatic way to remember our heroes and could be an event where
people
can exchange their culture. National Days become a memorable celebration
that is
held once a year in every country. All
people
are gathered in one field to perform and conduct a ceremony.
For instance
, in Indonesia, citizens are very excited to celebrate national days every year on 17 of August. Every institution raised the flags and did some
events
such
as sports and dance competitions. It's a very exciting yet challenging situation where
people
would do everything to win.
On the other hand
, it is
also
necessary to hold festivals once to twice a year.
Due to
the increase in tourism, the cultural festival is the best way to engage tourists from foreign countries. It becomes an event where
people
can promote their culture.
For example
, in Makassar, Indonesia, there is a festival named F9 where there are many tourists and local
people
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in one place. The benefits are local
people
can sell traditional dishes and products which leads to an increase in their income. In conclusion, it is not wrong to spend
money
on holding festivals in every country, especially
events
that can increase
people
's revenue. Even though, there are many essential matters that
people
can use the
money
for,
such
as donating to orphanages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public celebrations,
  • Foster,
  • National identity,
  • Societal bonds,
  • Cultural heritage,
  • Economic stimulus,
  • Tourism,
  • Revenue,
  • Seasonal employment,
  • Educational opportunities,
  • Tradition,
  • Mental health,
  • Well-being,
  • Misallocation of resources,
  • Public services,
  • Inclusivity,
  • Environmental impact,
  • Littering,
  • Pollution,
  • Carbon footprint,
  • Cost-effective,
  • Community-driven
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