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The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The given bar graph illustrates
a
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data on
people
 who have
coffee
routine
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routines
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 in 5 different Australian cities. The number of
people
are
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is
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 displayed in percentages.
Overall
,
it is clear that
, in three cities, namely Sydney,Melbourne and Hobart, going to
cafe
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a cafe
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 itself has been more
preffered
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preferred
. Taking a closer look
to
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at
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detailes
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details
, In Sydney over 60% of
people
 went to any
cafe
 shops around for drinking.
However
, roughly half of
people
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the people
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 bought instant
coffee
last
 month
while
 44% of them got a fresh one. More or less indicators were followed in
melbourne
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Melbourne
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 and Hobart as they were in Sydney.
In addition
 in both cities, Melbourne and Hobart, almost 65
percent
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 of
people
 enjoyed their drink in a
cafe
. By
compare
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comparing
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 them, Brisbane's and Adelaide's citizens' preference was a bit different.
Number
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The number
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 of
people
 who drank fresh
coffee
 was 34% which
were
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 the least
indicators
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indicator
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 on
given
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the given
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 graph. In Adelaide, half of
population
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the population
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 bought instant
coffee
that
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even
left
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leaving
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 behind
cafe
 shop lovers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee, cafe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • preference
  • beverage
  • caffeine
  • demographics
  • trend
  • survey
  • cultural significance
  • habit
  • seasonal variation
  • health consciousness
  • availability
  • implications
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • data interpretation
  • quantitative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • peak times
  • economical impact
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