You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The table provides information about
pupils
Change noun form
pupils'
pupil's
attendances
in secondary Fix the agreement mistake
attendance
schools
which are divided into 4 groups, for nine
Correct determiner usage
a
years
period from 2000 Fix the agreement mistake
year
and
to 2009.
Correct word choice
apply
Overall
, it can be seen that,
the lowest proportion of pupils had Specialist Remove the comma
apply
Schools
. Moreover
, the highest had Voluntary-controlled and Community schools
.
In 2000, Grammar
Correct article usage
the Grammar
school
had the twice percentage of Specialist Fix the agreement mistake
schools
Schools
24% and 12% respectively. Furthermore
, after 5 years, Grammar schools
Change noun form
school's
schools'
percent
was Change the spelling
per cent
decrased
by 5% and in 2009 by 7%. Correct your spelling
decreased
In addition
, Specialist
Correct article usage
the Specialist
Schools
percentage was
Unnecessary verb
apply
decrased
by 1% in each period.
Regarding Correct your spelling
decreased
to
the Voluntary-controlled Remove the preposition
apply
schools
in 2000 it
had more than Correct pronoun usage
they
a
half Correct article usage
apply
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
a
pupils. In 2005 was more than a third and in Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
final
year it was a fifth of Add an article
the final
a
students. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
In addition
, Community schools
in first
year had more than one in ten and in 2005 less than a third of school children . Change the article
the first
Finally
, in 2009 its numbers increased to 58%.Submitted by zarinadalab on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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