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Band 7.5

Describe some of the interesting places in your country

Though my
country
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 is small, there are many
places
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 of interest spread throughout the
country
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. In the Southernmost part of the
country
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, where the state of Johore lies, there are some very interesting and beautiful
places
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. In Kota Tinggi,
for example
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, there are beautiful waterfalls that are visited by many people every day.
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, there is Johore Lama, a
place
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 of great historical interest. In Johor Bahru, there is a beautiful beach
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 visited daily by several people who love the sea. In Batu Pahat, another
town
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 in Johore, is Minyak Buku, an interesting
place
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 on the coast. As we go towards the North, we arrive at Malacca, the oldest
town
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 that the Europeans occupied in Malaya in the past. The influences of the Portuguese and the Dutch can still be seen in many of the buildings there.
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 North lies Port Dickson which is well known for its beautiful beaches. In Kuala Lumpur, the capital of Malaysia, there are many
places
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 of interest
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 as Batu Caves, the zoo, and the museum. The city itself is an interesting
place
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 to visit. Another beautiful
town
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 is Penang, situated on an island. The sea around it makes it the most beautiful
town
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 in the
country
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.
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, the paddy fields in the Northernmost parts of the
country
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 are
also
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 very beautiful and interesting to look at. On the East coast of the
country
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 too, there are some beautiful towns
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 as Kuantan and Kuala Terengganu. All these
places
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 have indeed made my
country
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 an interesting
place
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 to live in.

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task response
Overall, you have responded effectively to the task. You provided a clear and comprehensive answer by describing several interesting places in your country. Your essay demonstrated a good range of vocabulary and you supported your main points with relevant examples and details.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear and logical structure. Each paragraph focuses on a specific place of interest in your country. However, consider organizing your ideas in a more systematic manner by using topic sentences and transitional phrases to enhance the coherence and flow of your essay.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is generally effective in conveying your ideas. However, try to incorporate more varied and sophisticated vocabulary to enhance your lexical resource. This can be achieved by using synonyms, idiomatic expressions, and descriptive language to add depth and richness to your descriptions of the places.
grammatical range
In terms of grammatical range and accuracy, your essay is well-written with minimal errors. However, to further improve, pay attention to subject-verb agreement, sentence structure, and the correct use of punctuation. Additionally, try to vary your sentence structures by incorporating complex and compound sentences.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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