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Today , many people do not know their neighbours in large cities . What problems do this cause ? What can be done about this ?

#people #neighbours #cities
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In the state-of-the-art society ,
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 plethora of individuals do not have knowledge about their next-door people in
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 . The root cause for
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 is the lack of connection between them .
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 it can be addressed by having more face-to-face meetings in order to improve the relationships nearby The underlying root of
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 problem is busy work schedules in a lifetime . Despite the development of social media , the regrettable reality is that people do not have enough time to access the Internet with the aim of having more relationships .
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 situation stems from the pace of living is too swift .Another salient issue is that more and more citizens go out to work and return to their homes as a daily routine .
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 , it can lead to an adverse impact on their mental health, namely certain feelings of loneliness or isolation, even depression . Take Japan as an interesting example , residents of
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 country tend to live lonely
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 the fact that the cost of living is expensive
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, some possible suggestions can be made to mitigate these issues.The most effective method is that individuals can take some time off, especially during the weekend for lunch or dinner to invite their co-neighbours in order to get in touch and share their
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 which could help them to let their hair down and could help to release anxiety.
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 , inhabitants not only help themselves
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 but
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 help others find
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happiness in life
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 , it can be seen that the lack of knowledge about neighbours stems from poor association with others .
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 , the more time people have ,the more satisfaction
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 both work and life
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coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the organization of your essay and ensure that your ideas flow logically from one paragraph to another.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Work on your sentence structure and grammar to avoid errors and improve clarity.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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