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Today many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Recently,
people
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 around the world have been changing that citizens
turn
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 into insensitive so they do not interact with
neighbors
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neighbours
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 in urban areas. The main cause is the increasing
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pace
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the pace
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 of
people
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’s lives and it can be solved by activities of
society
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the society
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 in the local which government encourage to hold per year. It is easy to see obviously that
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the populations
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populations
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population
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 in a big city are
so
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too
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 busy to talk together. Many surveys show that some families are staying
a
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department quite hard to talk with their neighbors because of the extra work time in the company.
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 problem
make
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people
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 have far distance and cause
much
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 consequences.
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, current affairs in Vietnam have a speech about serious accidents
in
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 roads,
however
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,
people
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 around just standing, watching and
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. The severe issue can be
cope
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solved
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 well with
support
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the support
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 of the government. Authorities can organize some activities that develop
relationship
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relationships
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 between
people
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 and
people
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.
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, in Ho Chi Minh some universities hold a trip
that
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where
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 undergraduates will come to rural places to help and make
this
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 side better. In conclusion,
demand
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the demand
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of
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people
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’s lifestyle is rising day by day, I
people
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is
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 jealous and insensitive,
the
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society will be destroyed one day. So not only inhabitants but
also
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people
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 around the world should set off a good relationship with
people
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 near their house as soon as possible

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task response
The essay lacks clear and comprehensive ideas related to the topic. The response to the prompt is incomplete, and the examples provided are not fully relevant to the question.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear logical structure with an introduction that sets up the main points and a conclusion that sums up the arguments. The ideas are not effectively connected throughout the essay, and the coherence and cohesion could be improved.
lexical resource
The essay has a limited range of vocabulary and lacks precision in expressing ideas. There are also instances of inaccurate word choices and awkward phrasing that hinder the clarity of the message.
grammatical range
The essay shows a limited control of grammatical structures and tenses, leading to errors that affect the overall clarity and coherence of the writing. The use of verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structures needs improvement.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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