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Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problem does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbors #cities
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It is true that many individuals who live in metropolitan cities do not recognize their
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neighbors
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. The root cause for
this
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 is the
lack
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 of
sense
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 of
community
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 and having a hectic lifestyle, yet it can be solved by creating shared
spaces
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 in the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. The prime reason for not caring about next-door
people
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 is their hectic lifestyles.
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 the fact that, in a big city, the pace of
life
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 is as fast as
rocket
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 and
people
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 have to do all activities as they can to earn living costs.
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,
people
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 will not have
mind
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a mind
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 to find out what
are
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 going on with
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neighbors
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 and communicate with them. Take Ho Chi Minh City in Vietnam as an example, the citizens wake up
so
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early every day to go to work until
the
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midnight. Some of them do not have
opportunity
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 to communicate with relatives at home and in truth, there
is
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 a few
people
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 has
intimate
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an intimate
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 connection with other
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neighbors
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.
Besides
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 that, it should be
gasped
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 that
sense
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 of
community
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 has a significant impact on
people
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’s lives. Now, the
lack
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 of
sense
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 of
community
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 in society is becoming more considerable.
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 is because
people
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 think that their own benefits are more vital than
of
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those of
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 the
community
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 and they do not want to share their properties
for
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with
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 others around them.
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, they do not have any information about their
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neighbors
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neighbours
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 and it can lead to
the
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lack
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 of communication with other
people
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. Take Shanghai of China as
example
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,
people
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 live
in
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there,
they
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only do their work and
not
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do not
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take their
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 attention
on
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to
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 the neighborhood. The most productive measure for
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 problem is creating shared
spaces
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 for everyone in
neighborhood
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the neighborhood
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. It should be appreciated that
people
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 can sit and talk to each other about some new's in
life
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 and share
life
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's experiences.
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, all
people
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 can have a relaxing time after a busy day
with
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full of exhaustion.
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, they
also
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 collect more experiences which can help them enhance
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. In Los Angeles, there are many coffee shops and clubs which create more opportunities for
people
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speak
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 to others and have more relationships.
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,
people
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 should
creating
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create
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 some shared
spaces
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 to connect to their
neighbors
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.
To sum up
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,
it is clear that
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 some individuals do not recognise their next-door
people
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 currently in
mega cities
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megacities
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 are the major catalyst for their eventful lifestyle and the
lack
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 of
sense
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 of
community
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. The strongest method for
this
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 problem is opening sharing
spaces
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 for all
people
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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