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You have recently read a newspaper article about your school friend whom you did not hear about for a long time. Write a letter to the newspaper editor highlighting some article details. Ask for some information about your friend.

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Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing a letter about
classmate
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 who appeared in your newspaper. Whenever I read the daily newspaper I see
must
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most
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the
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of the
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 article section.
Besides
this
,
lots
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 of information I acquired from different topics. When I read today's newspaper I saw my friend Harry's picture on the front page
alongwith
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along with
 his details.
Although
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However
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, he had moved to
UK
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the UK
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for working
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to work
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 and I have not seen
to
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apply
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him
from
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for
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 2 years. The information is mentioned of my colleague that he has missed from his house
from
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for
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 three months. The police
is
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are
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 being searched
to
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for
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 him when his
famiy
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family
 reported. He had not contacted anyone with his family and friends. The police
has
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have
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also
 investigated with neighbours or office staff but nobody
seen to
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saw
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 him.
Furthermore
,
who
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those who
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 find
to
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apply
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Harry the police will
give
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 an award. I want to
inquire from
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ask
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 you to provide me
information
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with information
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his
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on his
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 address and family contact number so I
will
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can
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 be in touch with him. If you do.so for me it will
really
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be really
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 helpful to find my friend. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours Sincerely,
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task response
Ensure that the letter is focused on asking for information about your friend, rather than providing unnecessary details.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a clear and logical manner. Consider using paragraphs to separate different points.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express your thoughts more accurately and effectively. Use synonyms and varied sentence structures.
grammatical range
Improve your grammar by paying attention to sentence construction and word order.
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