The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
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The bar graph
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compares the expenditure of weekly salary by a family in 1968 and 2018, on
diffrent
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different
commodities like
food
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, housing etc., in a nation.
Overall
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,
in
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the beginning of the time period majority of the earnings were spent on
food
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and by the
end
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it
got
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replaced by leisure activities.
Least
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capital was invested
on
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fuel and power in both years. Around 35 per
cent
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of the weekly income went directly to
food
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supplies in 1968,
following
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this
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, housing and clothing shared
same
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values of about 10 per
cent
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.
Rest
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of the needs like fuel, household and personal goods, transport and leisure clocked nearly similar
value
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values
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of a little somewhere 8 per
cent
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. In 2018, more than two-thirds of the per week earnings went into
food
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, housing and leisure counting approximately 16, 18 and 22 per
cent
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, respectively. Less than 5 per
cent
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of the capital was invested
on
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fuel and personal goods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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