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In the future, the main resean for going to shoping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop. Do you agree or disagree.

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There is no denying the fact that online shopping in the future can be a debatable subject.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that going to the mall will be for
entertainment
 not shopping. there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the growth of online stores will lead to malls being for
entertainment
 not for shop.
To begin
 with, Shopping malls are increasingly focusing on providing
entertainment
 options.
In other words
, malls realize that most of the income in recent years comes from
entertainment
 than shopping.
In addition
, the fact that fewer employees will lead to an increase in revenue.
For example
, if the cost is reduced the returns will get bigger which will increase the capital. Another point to consider is that online shopping is gaining popularity, making physical shopping less necessary. It is
also
 possible to say that, It has easy access and reach so it leads to fast growth.
Moreover
, online shop it is needs less money so it is not as costly as real shops.
For instance
, fewer bills like electricity bills or rent for the place. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that the future of shopping is online shopping, and
this
 sector will become bigger than ever because it provides individuals with the easiest ways to manage it at the lowest possible cost, I suggest that the governments help the youth to build their business.
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task response
Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed and clearly express your opinion on whether shopping malls will be for entertainment or shopping in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • relying heavily on
  • transforming
  • consumer behavior
  • shift
  • virtual
  • convenience
  • brick-and-mortar stores
  • retail landscape
  • evolving
  • diversifying
  • leisure activities
  • amenities
  • socializing
  • shopaholic
  • impulse buying
  • concessions
  • window shopping
  • consumer preferences
  • entertainment options
  • browse
  • e-commerce
  • online retailers
  • convenient
  • carousel
  • movie theater
  • food court
  • bowling alley
  • arcade
  • play area
  • shopping spree
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