You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Bullying is a big problem in many schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
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Task Response
Clearly state your opinion on the causes of bullying and the solutions you suggest. Use topic sentences to introduce each paragraph and provide a clear structure to your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Pay attention to the organization and coherence of your essay. Ensure a clear introduction and conclusion, and use transition words to connect your ideas throughout the essay.
Lexical Resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and varied language to express your ideas. Avoid repetition of words and phrases.
Grammatical Range
Work on your sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and accuracy. Review the use of verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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