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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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People are always in need of buying or renting a home to be under a roof.
However
, nowadays buying a
house
 has been preferred more than hiring. Personally, I consider it
as
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a good trend , though there are some negative factors.
First,
one of the positive reasons
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 having your own
house
 is you are less responsible to someone. To be more clear,
this
house
 is your property
that
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 leads you to treat
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 you want. In
this
 case, you do not have to be cautious
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 drawn walls or torn cushions.
Moreover
, owning your
house
 means that you do not have to pay money to someone every single month. These all bring stability,comfort to you or your family and the feeling of belonging
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somewhere.
Secondly
, having your
house
 means you can decorate as u desire. When we rent a
house
 we mostly are not allowed to change
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equipment
equipments
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equipment
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 or decorate it
whereas
 those all are possible with your own one. As
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another plus, there is not a landlord who can break the contract suddenly we you and kick you out. All have been mentioned above, ensure us , why people
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tend to buy a
house
 more.
On the other hand
, by compare buying a home costs more than renting. If a person wants to have
own
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 property he/ she will probably get a mortgage that not
everone
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everyone
 is able to have saving. So, they will have to pay for
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 20 or 25 years to
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.
Furthermore
, if anything is wrong with the
house
, changing it will not be as easy as expected. In conclusion,
although
 there are some negative aspects, buying
house
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 is always a better option
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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