Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is an opinion that giving driver licenses for vehicles like cars or motorbikes to
people
later than now will help to decrease the number of Use synonyms
accidents
on the roads. Many Use synonyms
people
believe that teenagers are not responsible enough to Use synonyms
drive
as they Use synonyms
drive
too fast. Use synonyms
However
, adults Linking Words
drive
irresponsibly as well. I completely disagree with it as many Use synonyms
accidents
happen Use synonyms
due to
using smartphones and other devices during driving and drug or Linking Words
alcohol
addictions.
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People
use electronic devices like smartphones Use synonyms
while
they are driving at any Linking Words
age
. It could be business calls or personal conversations between different Use synonyms
people
. For those who Use synonyms
drive
a lot, it seems convenient to use Use synonyms
this
time to connect with others. Sitting in the car in busy traffic is a good time for many Linking Words
people
to check the news or social media as well. Use synonyms
For instance
, one out of every four car Linking Words
accidents
in the US is caused by texting Use synonyms
while
driving, and these are not at the minimum legal Linking Words
age
for driving.
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Moreover
, driving under drugs or Linking Words
alcohol
is Use synonyms
also
not inherent to Linking Words
people
at any specific Use synonyms
age
. No matter how old they are they could Use synonyms
drive
vehicles being addicted Use synonyms
due to
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this
problem existing for men and women from different Linking Words
age
groups, not only the youngest. Use synonyms
For example
, the study of the US road safety regulator can be used, which shows that more than half the Linking Words
people
injured or killed in car crashes had drugs or Use synonyms
alcohol
in their bloodstream. It is not possible that all of them were at a young Use synonyms
age
.
In conclusion, increasing the minimum legal Use synonyms
age
for driving will not help to improve road safety because Use synonyms
this
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age
is not the main cause of road Use synonyms
accidents
, compared with using electronic devices and drug or Use synonyms
alcohol
addiction.Use synonyms
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