The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
The map
display
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the difference that
west park secondary
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West Park Secondary School
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school
have taken lots of changes from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
it is clear that
earlier
school
was not have
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place
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a place
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for sports and no any space for parking . Currently,in 1950 houses,
playground
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and farmland
attach
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at
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the
school
and
main
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road in front of the
school
.
Furthermore
,there were changes in
this
place
car park,science block and sports fields were new additions.
According to
the
place
,that
place
had more develop
and
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area of car parking was expanded in 2010
whereas
,playing games area had been short and
also
play ground
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playground
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was
too
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the too
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small and main road was still there
as well as
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the
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school
building was as It is.
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