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You are not satisfied with many problems and with the changing room in a Sports Centre that you visit. Write a letter to the Sports Centre manager. In your letter Explain the problem Say how you feel about this problem What steps you would like manager to take.

#room #sports #centre #visit #manager #steps
Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing
this
 letter to complain towards many issues
on
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 your changing room in
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the Sport
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Sport
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Sports
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Centre
. My name is Mochammad Hendra, a new member of
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the Sport
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Sport
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Sports
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Centre
. It is true that
Sports
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the Sports
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Centre
 has a great review on Google for its facility. Unfortunately, I don't feel comfortable with the changing room, there are many things
are
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that are
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 outdated and in need of repair. The changing rooms need
a
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proper cleaning and maintenance, because
of
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It's often dirty after a
couple
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 days I working out
on
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at
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the Sport
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Sport
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Centre
. Even the showers are not functioning properly,
the
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 water frequently
not
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 come out in the afternoon. Especially I want to highlight the ventilation and lighting. The ventilation is not adequate and
resulting
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terrible
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a terrible
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 smell. The lighting often
blinking
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 out and it makes
difficult
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it difficult
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 to see.
Furthermore
, I want to request as a new member to fix the problem
immeadiately
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immediately
, so people can
workout
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work
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 more
comfortable
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 in
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the Sport
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Sport
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Sports
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Centre
. Regards Hendra
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task response
Make sure to clearly mention the specific problems with the changing room in the Sports Centre. Provide specific examples to support your claims.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas more coherently and ensure a logical flow between sentences and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to describe the issues and your feelings about them.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure, tense consistency, and use of punctuation to improve grammatical range.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsanitary
  • unpleasant
  • frustrating
  • substandard
  • unacceptable
  • disappointing
  • inconvenient
  • unhygienic
  • maintenance
  • cleaning
  • facilities
  • outdated
  • repair
  • shortage
  • lockers
  • benches
  • showers
  • functioning
  • staff
  • unhelpful
  • impolite
  • privacy partitions
  • ventilation
  • smell
  • lighting
  • inspections
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