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Mrs Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer.

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Introduction
Dear Mrs Barrett,
Body paragraph 1
I found an advert in
newspaper
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the newspaper
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 that you are looking
someone
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for someone
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 to help
in
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apply
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next summer.
Body paragraph 2
I am Shoaib and
i
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 am a university student, i can help you
for
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this
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 season, as
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 have enough free time
in
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this
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 summer
due to
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 semester break.
Body paragraph 3
So , I can help you to perform daily errands, i am a good driver so
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 can assist
to make
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 your commute comfortable,
also
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i
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an
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occassional
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occasional
 chef so
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 can
asssit
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assist
 in
kitchen
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 as well.
Body paragraph 4
Actually , I have to pay my upcoming semester fee so
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 was looking to do some paid work to address that need,
i
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 found myself
a
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 right person for
this
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 job as
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 have practical experience
of
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performing
this
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 kind of assistance since
my
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high school.
Body paragraph 5
Although
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, there will be no classes in summer
but
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i
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 will not be free the whole day so
i
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 can spare myself between 9am to 1pm or 6pm to 9pm , as
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 have study
assignment
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 to finish,
Conclusion
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 live by your block so commuting will not be an issue for me.

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task response
Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the advert and provide a clear response to what Mrs Barrett is looking for.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay in a structured manner with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and varied sentence structures to enhance your writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammar and sentence construction to ensure accuracy and clarity.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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