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Describe a foreigner who can speak Chinese very well

A person I would like to talk about is no more than one of my French foreign
friends
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, and her name is Susan. Honestly, She is an amazing woman, cue she can speak
Chinese
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 fluently. Honestly, I do have a quite number of foreign
friends
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, including French, Indian, American, and so on. But she is the only person who can talk to me in
Chinese
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. I still remember, about three years ago, I met her in a local public park in my hometown. After that, we became best
friends
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, since we found that we have the same interests, like talking about culture around the world. Apart from that, we can become close
friends
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, as we can communicate with each other in
Chinese
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. Before, I asked her the reason why she can speak
Chinese
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 very well, because you know, learning
Chinese
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 is not an easy thing for most foreigners, can you imagine, that most
Chinese
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 words are complicated to understand for everyone? She told me a bit of effective methods for how she learns or remembers these things. 
Firstly
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, before she came to China, she started to take part in some Elementary
Chinese
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 classes in French.
Secondly
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, when she got to the elementary level of using
Chinese
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, she found a social worker job in China, so she could have more opportunities to chat with some local
Chinese
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 citizens.
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, after Her
Chinese
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 skills improved, she continued to find a new position, which was as a French teacher at a local university. Right now, she can speak
Chinese
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 just like a local person, she can even use some idioms that I do not know, so I am so proud of her since she shows a valuable personality trait, she does not give up.

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