Discuss the causes and some effects of widespread drug use by young people in modern day society. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Society's vices are always sophisticated problems. Especially, among young people who often are attracted by experienced new things
such
as drugs
. This
phenomenon can arise from the lack of taking care from their family, to reduce stress or to fit in with their peers. These purposes can lead to negative effects on themselves and the public social
. Replace the word
society
This
essay is going to detail these causes and effects and some recommendations to address youth drug
abuse
.
Young peoples
nowadays are easily related to isolated situations. They can Fix the agreement mistake
people
have feeling
that they must face Wrong verb form
feel
with
their issues independently because of busy parents. Change preposition
apply
In addition
, the amount of knowledge in schools also
increase
Change the verb form
increases
lead
to Wrong verb form
leading
stresses
on Fix the agreement mistake
stress
young
generation. Meanwhile, Correct article usage
the young
drugs
can make them forgetting
everything or Wrong verb form
forget
feeling
better Wrong verb form
feel
in
a period of time. Change preposition
for
Therefore
, the
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apply
drug
abuse
is
growing recently.
Wrong verb form
has been
Paralell
to the widespread Correct your spelling
Parallel
drug
is a number of problems. Young peoples
can not be abled to buy Fix the agreement mistake
people
drugs
by themselves because they still depend on their family
. Fix the agreement mistake
families
Hence
, they can gain money in negative ways, even in violated regulation methods. Another effect is the adverse affects
on their health. All Replace the word
effects
drugs
made
from toxic sources. Add a missing verb
are made
Consequently
, using without
knowledge can lead to huge problems Correct pronoun usage
it without
on
health Change preposition
in
such
as mental diseases or heart diseases.
To resolve Correct article usage
the above
above
issues, there should be Correct article usage
the above
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apply
the
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corporation
between the family and the Correct your spelling
cooperation
goverment
. Correct your spelling
government
First,
parents need to pay attention on
their children. They should find Change preposition
to
the
balance between family and work. Their babies Correct article usage
a
reserve
to have Correct your spelling
deserve
their
time to take care of them and support them to delete their concerns. Change the word
the
Second,
the goverment
must control Correct your spelling
government
strickly
their related regulations and adjust when finding the necessary to ensure suitable rules. Correct your spelling
strictly
Therefore
, the
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apply
drug
abuse
can not be widespread.
In conclusion, family and morden
tress can be the causes of Correct your spelling
modern
the
Correct article usage
apply
drug
abuse
, which can lead to violation the
laws or diseases. Change preposition
of the
Accordingly
, we should apply strength
methods from both family and government to reduce Replace the word
strong
these problem
and protect our young generation.Change the determiner
this problem
these problems
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