The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows information on the changes in
copper
, nickel and zinc in every month of the year 2014.
Overall
, the price of these three types of metal fluctuated over a period of one year, except for the period from July to September. Looking at the graph closely, it is significant to note that the percentage of nickel's changing price hit its highest peak, which was 6%, followed by
copper
and zinc. After, nickel saw a dramatic drop, from 4% to 1%, and zinc overtook it and became the first place among them.
However
, in the same period, the
copper
still was the latest one between them, which had a gradual decrease, from 2% to 0%. In July, all three experienced the lowest point, at -1%, -0.5%,
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% respectively. After July, all of the three categories remained steady
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and started changing after October. In the
last
month, the changing price of
copper
was the highest one, which is 2%.
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  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
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  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
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