How did you choose your proposed course and institution?
From my perspective, working as a civil engineer
especially
in Add the comma(s)
, especially
government
institution needs a Correct article usage
a government
lot
diversity of knowledge, not only water resources theory but Add the preposition
lot of
also
awareness about how to manage RAB as good
as possible. The sustainability of water resource Change the word
well
management
is also
depending
on how Wrong verb form
depends
succced is
the construction Correct word choice
successful
management
. There are three main aspect
in construction Change to a plural noun
aspects
management
which are money, time, and quality. These are depending
each other. Wrong verb form
depend on
For example
, to build a dam you need to know all about dam
itself, since it costs more expensive than Add an article
the dam
another
water construction, we need to know how to maintain the cost by managing the price without neglecting the quality. Not only the priceCorrect quantifier usage
other
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
time management
is the
essential aspect to be considered. Method of work is needed to get the efficient cost by the time. Correct article usage
an
In
the other hand, to do work acceleration we have to give higher cost. Finding the balance between these three main aspects is the one thing I want to know by studying in my Change preposition
On
master
program.Change noun form
master's
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks structural coherence and clear transitions between ideas. Consider using introductory phrases and summary sentences to better connect paragraphs and main points.
task achievement
It seems that the main idea of choosing a proposed course and institution is somewhat addressed, but it is not clear and detailed. Expand on how the course and institution link directly to your career goals.
lexical resource
Work on including a more diverse range of sentence structures to enhance readability and convey your points more effectively.
grammatical range
Improve grammatical accuracy by checking for subject-verb agreement, proper tense usage, and correct word forms. Consistent grammatical errors detract from the overall quality of the essay.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite