How did you choose your proposed course and institution?

From my perspective, working as a civil engineer
especially
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in
government
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institution needs a
lot
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diversity of knowledge, not only water resources theory but
also
awareness about how to manage RAB as
good
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as possible. The sustainability of water resource
management
is
also
depending
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on how
succced is
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successful
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the construction
management
. There are three main
aspect
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in construction
management
which are money, time, and quality. These
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each other.
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, to build a dam you need to know all about
dam
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itself, since it costs more expensive than
another
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water construction, we need to know how to maintain the cost by managing the price without neglecting the quality. Not only the price
,
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but
also
time
management
is
the
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essential aspect to be considered. Method of work is needed to get the efficient cost by the time.
In
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the other hand, to do work acceleration we have to give higher cost. Finding the balance between these three main aspects is the one thing I want to know by studying in my
master
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program.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks structural coherence and clear transitions between ideas. Consider using introductory phrases and summary sentences to better connect paragraphs and main points.
task achievement
It seems that the main idea of choosing a proposed course and institution is somewhat addressed, but it is not clear and detailed. Expand on how the course and institution link directly to your career goals.
lexical resource
Work on including a more diverse range of sentence structures to enhance readability and convey your points more effectively.
grammatical range
Improve grammatical accuracy by checking for subject-verb agreement, proper tense usage, and correct word forms. Consistent grammatical errors detract from the overall quality of the essay.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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