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The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The data provides information on road
transportation
usage
 by various means of
transportation
 in six European
countries
as well as
 shows the average in
European
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the European
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 Union.
Overall
, it is evident, that in most of the
countries
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countries,
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 the numbers are higher than the average for
EU
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the EU
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. Noticeably, only two
countries
, Germany and Spain, have driven by car below the
EU
 average, precisely speaking, less than approximately 2 thousand
kilometres
 compared to the
EU
 one. In terms of car
transportation
, the most
usage
 is seen in the figure of Denmark, which reaches more than
12 000
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12,000
kilometres
 per year. Surprisingly, the
usage
 of
such
transportation
 methods like bus, train and bike was more than double the amount of average in
EU
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the EU
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 in Denmark reaching 3000
kilometres
.
However
,
in addition
, only in Italy the
usage
 of those were higher than the average. When it comes to Spain, France, Germany and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, those varied between 900 and 1200
kilometres
. In general, the commute time was highest in the United Kingdom
for
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at
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 almost
a
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apply
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45
minute
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minutes
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,
similarly
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similar
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 to
the
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apply
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Germany.
Countries
 like Denmark, France and Spain were slightly above the average, which was around 30 minutes. The only country that stayed below was Italy with
the
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a
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20 minute
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20-minute
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 commuting time.
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