Some people believe citizens should be allowed to carry handguns in order to protect themthelves, while others think this can lead to many social security problems in the society. What is your opinion? Use specific rsasons to support your answer.
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Firstly
, if governments don’t allow the property of handguns it is going to turn complicated to access one which is going to give security to the entire population. Linking Words
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sale
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kind
of people with a variety of intentions. Fix the agreement mistake
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Secondly
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handgun
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a handgun
USA
, has led to armed attacks in schools, which is nuts. As a foreseeing Correct article usage
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, schools need an attack protocol, just as teachers have to be specially prepared to know how to act in case of assault. Correct the article-noun agreement
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and teachers
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it
is not necessary for me.
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it
has Correct pronoun usage
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horrible
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the
mental health, Correct article usage
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the
quality of life in communities. Correct word choice
and the
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