The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The line graph above describes the total
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of minutes of
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the
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phone
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calling
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in the UK. The data
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in billions and divided into three categories from 1995-2002.
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, local calls dominated the area in all years. In 1995, people in the UK tended to use phones for
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local
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, at 70 million a year, the
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has increased and reached
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peak in 1999 at 90
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.
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, the
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decreased by around 20 million in 2002. Over the years, national and international telephone calls have become popular. The
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rose
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than 20 million from 1995 over the next 7 years.
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, in 1995 the use of mobile phones was less popular than the other categories, the
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stated below 5
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. Surprisingly, the sudden increase happened until 2002.
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, the use of mobile phones is still the lowest category all the time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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