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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter •say which part-time course you booked •explain about booking a different course •ask about booking a different course

#course #college #administrator #•say #•explain #•ask
Dear Sir: I am Enas, a student at Science Collage,
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 you are the administrator. I had booked a part-time biology
course
 at the college
last
 week. and I am writing to you
for
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 formally
cancelled
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cancel
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 my booking for a reason.I will elaborate
it
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on it
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 .
According to
 the curriculum and the timetable of the
course
.I figure out, it’s going to
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distrubte
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distributed
 with my new work at the restaurant. Since
,
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 I should work to cover the feeses of
this
course
 .
Thus
 I have two main Purposes
to cancel
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the
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my booking.
In addition
, I am asking about the content of
this
 semester to
booking in
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 a different
course
in
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at
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 another time .I am looking forward to emphasise with
my
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situation I mentioned above. Faithfully yours.
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Task Response
Ensure to address the task prompt fully and provide a clear and relevant response to all aspects of the task
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing need to be formal and appropriate. Ensure to use a formal salutation and closing (e.g., Dear Sir/Madam, Yours faithfully) when writing to an administrator
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more appropriate and varied language to express ideas clearly and effectively
Grammatical Range
Work on sentence structure, verb tenses, and punctuation to ensure accurate and varied use of grammar

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam
  • I am writing to inform you
  • I recently booked a part-time course
  • unfortunately, I won't be able to attend
  • due to unforeseen circumstances
  • regretfully cancel my booking
  • I would like to inquire about
  • availability of a different course
  • alternative course options
  • similar course that better suits my needs
  • kindly provide information regarding
  • procedure for booking the alternative course
  • I would greatly appreciate your assistance
  • Thank you in advance
  • Please contact me at your earliest convenience
  • Sincerely
  • Name
  • Phone number
  • Email address
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