The problem with society today is that it is essentially unbalanced, with some people being paid huge salaries to work very long hours, whilst others do not have a job and have too much time on their hands. There is no middle ground. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's
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individuals get huge benefits in order
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them to work long hours
whereas
another set of people are unemployed and have ample
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time in their lives.
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perceived imbalance in society. In my opinion, I agree that there is no center ground in people's
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. In
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essay, I have presented two supporting reasons to validate my stance.
To begin
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employment
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rate in a country is important to support the benefits of
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economy. In today's context, there is a huge demand for qualified individuals
due to
high competition in the business world. The reason why most of the individuals have idle time left
due to
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job is
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they
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necessary
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education and experience to get employed by the
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corporate
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However
, the limitation for quality education,
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welfare
wellfare
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welfare
benefits
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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