The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home or work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the crowded megacities and

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congestion in them have become a big problem for citizens to deal with. Some experts believe that, if fewer individuals utilize

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vehicles for their daily routine

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would be less in their cities. In

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essay,

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there are a few problems with the approach, I will explain why I agree with the solution. The human population is growing at a high rate globally.

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, the demand for more shopping centres and travelling and education facilities is rising. With more cars and

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vehicles available compared to previous decades, people are getting used to

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way of

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at an unstoppable rate.

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, the streets would always be busy and crowded.

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, many social experts suggest that if it were not for mass car production, cities would definitely be quieter and less congested. By expanding digital ways of communication and transportation, humans could enter a new era in which except for necessary situations nobody would look for

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vehicles.

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, online shopping in many developed countries has significantly decreased the tendency of individuals to buy stuff in person.

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, there is no need to go outside of the home and

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cars or

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, ambulances and police personnel could easily move and do their duties as fast as possible in a solitary space.

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, there are other ways which should be considered too.

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, developing new facilities for transportation which use other passes like Tunnels and even airborne taxis could be effective too.

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, Elon Musk, a well-known entrepreneur is working on underground tunnels and fast railways in Los Angeles City in order to overcome the immense

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of the city. In conclusion, people in many cities all around the world are suffering from

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and the issue is growing every day. From my perspective, investing in new ways of communication and transportation between humans combined with developing advanced and different routes for

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could solve the

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issue forever.

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The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people to travel from home or work, education or shopping. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Giving lectures in auditoriums to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching with the technology available today, there is no justification for it, and everything should be online. To what extent do you agree or disagree? give your own opinion.

Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?