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The graph show changes in spending habits of people in thw uk between 1971 and 2001.

The graph show changes in spending habits of people in thw uk between 1971 and 2001.
The pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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 alterations in spending habits in the UK for 30 years period from 1971 to 2001.
Ragarding
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Regarding
 to 1971 year period it can be seen that,
Food
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 had 44%
from
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of
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 all UK
spendings
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spending
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 and cars were twice
lower
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as much
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 than
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food
Correct article usage
the food
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 segment.
Furthermore
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, Petrol had one in ten
percentage
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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. Furniture was by 1% lower and restaurants for 3% by comparing with Petrol. Books and
computer
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computers
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 were unpopular in that era and had 6 and 2
percent
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per cent
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 respectively.
Furthermore
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, in 2001
Cars
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the Cars
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 segment overtook
foods
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the foods
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 segment and had more than
two fifth
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two-fifth
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 of all num.
Moreover
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,
food
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 and restaurants had identical
percantage
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percentage
 which was 14%.
Also
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. Furniture had 8% and computers
uncreased
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increased
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 its proportion
for
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to
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 10%.
Nevertheless
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,
books
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the books
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 fraction
was
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apply
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decreased
up
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by up
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 to 1%.
Overall
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, what
stand
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stands
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 out is that
,
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apply
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 in 2001 the highest spending proportion
were
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was
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 cars
while
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,
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apply
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 the lowest
were
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was
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 books.
Moreover
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, in 1971
Food
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 had the
bigest
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biggest
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percantage
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percentage
 and computers the lowest.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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