In many countries, people now wear western clothes (suits, jeans) rather than the traditional clothing. Why? (Reasons and relevant examples) Is this a positive or negative development?

every
country
has its own uniqueness and distinct features implemented in their lifestyles. we can view
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by looking at their fashion sense, creativity, and national habits that are shown in their daily lives.
however
, as time goes on, globalization
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place bringing on the midst of the modern customs of the
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countries. the increasing numbers of people throughout the world
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dresses
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up
according to
the laws of the
western
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lands have
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doubt, distinguished the facts that by the running time, their traditional cultures can be put
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risk of extinction. personally,
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agree with the latter. in
this
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would like to elaborate
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opinions regarding why
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chose
this
as a negative development. in my opinion, being able to follow and adapt through the wildfire of globalization is exceptionally needed in
this
digital era.
although
it is
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very
important, we must never forget about ourselves
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being
the representative of our own
country
. of course each
country
has its own symbol of disseminating
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their
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idiosyncratic natures, but the
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aspect
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that played an immense role
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to
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opportunity is
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on
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the attire that we wear. clothing in the garments of the specified others somehow may
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decrease
increase
the branding of the
country
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the respect of what the ancestors bestow upon us.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Influence
  • Perception
  • Modern
  • Trendy
  • Practicality
  • Comfort
  • Professionalism
  • Integration
  • Global economy
  • Cultural identity
  • Appreciation
  • Preservation
  • Individual expression
  • Freedom of choice
  • Positive
  • Negative
  • Impacts
  • Local industries
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