The graph below shows contribution the the economy of turkey by sectors in 2000 and 2016 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows  contribution the the economy of turkey by sectors in 2000 and 2016

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts below illustrate the collaboration
economy
of Turkey in 8 different
part
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in 2000 and 2016.
It is clear that
in 2000 the most
contribution
to the
economy
related to agriculture
while
in 2016 healthcare and education had high percentages. In detail, in 2000, agriculture, healthcare and education and leisure and hospitality were the most
sector
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sectors
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in Turkey that achieved donating about 24 and 17 per
cent
respectively.
Following
this
, trade, utilities and transportation and government about 14 and 12 per
cent
respectively help to the
economy
of their country.
While
manufacturing, finance, business and
other
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others
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only 8 and 5 per
cent
could help the
economy
of Turkey. At least, construction had
a
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lowest
contribution
to the
economy
only 3 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, in 2016 the
contribution
of agriculture to help
economy
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the economy
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decreased
moderatly
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moderately
and reached 14 per
cent
.
Also
, the percentages assist of healthcare and education remained unchanged
17
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%.
Othewise
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Otherwise
,the proportion
contribution
of manufacturing and construction and finance and
other
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others
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in
economy
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the economy
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increased in 2016 and reached 10% and 12% and 8% respectively.
Finally
, the proportion donation of government, trade, utilities and
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transportation
transportaion
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transportation
in
economy
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the economy
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by
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about 3 per
cent
decreased
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Vocabulary: Replace the words economy, contribution, cent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • contribution
  • economy
  • sectors
  • agriculture
  • tourism
  • construction
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • percentage
  • increase/decrease
  • significant
  • stable
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • comparative
  • data representation
  • industrial output
  • service industry
  • economic growth
  • time span
  • shift in dominance
  • comparative analysis
  • market sector
  • primary
  • secondary
  • tertiary
  • Quaternary
  • economical expansion
  • economic indicators
  • fiscal
  • year-on-year comparison
  • financial sector
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