The graph below shows contribution the the economy of turkey by sectors in 2000 and 2016 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts below illustrate the collaboration about 3 per
economy
of Turkey in 8 different part
in 2000 and 2016.
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parts
It is clear that
in 2000 the most contribution
to the economy
related to agriculture while
in 2016 healthcare and education had high percentages.
In detail, in 2000, agriculture, healthcare and education and leisure and hospitality were the most sector
in Turkey that achieved donating about 24 and 17 per Fix the agreement mistake
sectors
cent
respectively. Following
this
, trade, utilities and transportation and government about 14 and 12 per cent
respectively help to the economy
of their country. While
manufacturing, finance, business and other
only 8 and 5 per Fix the agreement mistake
others
cent
could help the economy
of Turkey. At least, construction had a
lowest Change the article
the
contribution
to the economy
only 3 per cent
.
On the other hand
, in 2016 the contribution
of agriculture to help economy
decreased Correct article usage
the economy
moderatly
and reached 14 per Correct your spelling
moderately
cent
. Also
, the percentages assist of healthcare and education remained unchanged 17
%. Change preposition
at 17
Othewise
,the proportion Correct your spelling
Otherwise
contribution
of manufacturing and construction and finance and other
in Fix the agreement mistake
others
economy
increased in 2016 and reached 10% and 12% and 8% respectively. Add an article
the economy
Finally
, the proportion donation of government, trade, utilities and Correct your spelling
transportation
transportaion
in Correct your spelling
transportation
economy
Add an article
the economy
Change preposition
by
cent
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