You have just spent a week with your friend on holiday. When you got home, you realized you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - thank your friend for the holiday - explain that you left your wallet in their house - give them instructions of how to send it back to you

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Dear Emma, It was

really

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a really

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good time we spent together. I am really thankful for that. I was organizing my stuff after I

get

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got

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back

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apply

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home and I was trying to find my

wallet

. I checked everywhere and I

coudn't

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couldn't

find my

wallet

at all. After, I

realize

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realised

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that I left the

wallet

by your TV Cabinet.I

dont

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don't

want to keep the

wallet

bag

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the bag

a bag

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thats

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that's

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why I put

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it by

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the TV. I hope you will easily find it. Once you find it please give me a call,

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and I

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will send you a

Fedex

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FedEx

prepaid envelope. You can just put my

wallet

in and return it to the

Fedex

Correct your spelling

FedEx

store.

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task response

The letter partially addresses the task requirements by thanking the friend for the holiday and explaining the situation. However, the instructions for sending back the wallet are not clear and need to be more specific.

coherence cohesion

The letter lacks a clear structure and coherence. It needs to be organized into distinct paragraphs with each paragraph focusing on a single aspect of the message (e.g., thanking for the holiday, explaining about the wallet, providing instructions). Additionally, the greeting and closing are informal and need to be more suitable for a formal letter.

lexical resource

The lexical resource is moderately varied, but certain informal expressions and colloquial language reduce the formality of the letter. Consider using more formal vocabulary and expressions to maintain the appropriate tone for the letter.

grammatical range

The grammatical range is adequate, but there are instances of errors in punctuation, sentence structure, and verb tense usage. Review the use of punctuation and work on forming more complex and varied sentence structures for a more sophisticated language use.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

111 words

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