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You have just spent a week with your friend on holiday. When you got home, you realized you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - thank your friend for the holiday - explain that you left your wallet in their house - give them instructions of how to send it back to you

#week #friend #holiday #home #wallet #house #instructions
Dear Emma, It was
really
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a really
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 good time we spent together. I am really thankful for that. I was organizing my stuff after I
get
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got
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 back
to
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apply
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home and I was trying to find my
wallet
. I checked everywhere and I
coudn't
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couldn't
 find my
wallet
 at all. After, I
realize
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realised
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 that I left the
wallet
 by your TV Cabinet.I
dont
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don't
 want to keep the
wallet
 in
bag
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the bag
a bag
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,
thats
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that's
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 why I put
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it by
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by
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on
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 the TV. I hope you will easily find it. Once you find it please give me a call,
I
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and I
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will send you a
Fedex
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FedEx
 prepaid envelope. You can just put my
wallet
 in and return it to the
Fedex
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FedEx
 store.
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task response
The letter partially addresses the task requirements by thanking the friend for the holiday and explaining the situation. However, the instructions for sending back the wallet are not clear and need to be more specific.
coherence cohesion
The letter lacks a clear structure and coherence. It needs to be organized into distinct paragraphs with each paragraph focusing on a single aspect of the message (e.g., thanking for the holiday, explaining about the wallet, providing instructions). Additionally, the greeting and closing are informal and need to be more suitable for a formal letter.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is moderately varied, but certain informal expressions and colloquial language reduce the formality of the letter. Consider using more formal vocabulary and expressions to maintain the appropriate tone for the letter.
grammatical range
The grammatical range is adequate, but there are instances of errors in punctuation, sentence structure, and verb tense usage. Review the use of punctuation and work on forming more complex and varied sentence structures for a more sophisticated language use.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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