Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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modern
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are stuck in social media in
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way.
however
, social
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platforms
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,
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and
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twitter
have more destructive effects rather than constructive effects. if
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asked,
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partially agree with
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will give my opinion in
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paragraph. on the one hand, it is truly acceptable that social media sites
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various
types
of content
likewise
some are good for communities but more are
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adversely
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affected
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on
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soft minded
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people.
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types
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affect
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mental health after a long period.
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different
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new
news
regarding
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going
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in some countries are presented in various
types
of YouTube channel, so that hugely affect on public.
moreover
, it is
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declining
the
procuctivity
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productivity
of work because
person
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people
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are mostly
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connected
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with
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to
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this
type of site and waste the productive time in
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scoring
and watching
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unnecessary
data. On the other side, social media
also
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provides
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the
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a
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plethora of information regarding
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situation without going anywhere. society
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the
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lot of information and
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conditions
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about
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various
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fields
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as well as
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about on
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of
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going
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ongoing
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trends in
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of
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apply
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area
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or
a
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ganing
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gaming
gaining
data about the present issues.
In addition
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by
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diffrent
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different
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platforms
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that
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which
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is
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good
to
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children for
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education
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perpose
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purposes
. As an example, during the
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pandemic
time online education through the YouTube was main reason to connect
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them
with study. In conclusion, it is truly acceptable that, various social
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sites
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are very popular in
this
globle
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global
globe
era.
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addictive,
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impacts
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on mental health because of
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exposure
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of
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to
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negative content.
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, some of the positive
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effects
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are
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connect with
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and gaining
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knowledge.
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