Some people think that genetically modified crops are a positive development. Others, however, argue that they are potentially dangerous. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There has been a great development in the agricultural department in recent years. On the one hand , a group of individuals believes that it is beneficial to modify the
crops
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genetically for a healthy diet.
On the other hand
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, some people think that
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practice is hazardous for nature . I am inclined towards the former notion.
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essay will discuss both views and will elaborate on my opinion.
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with , making slight changes in the
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at the gene level is a significantly healthy step.
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is because, by
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method, more nutritious fruits and vegetables can be yielded, which are good for physical well-being.
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, the National Agricultural Department of India started growing different types is bananas by means of gene therapy . Interestingly , they contain calcium 10 times higher than the normal bananas which are found to be good for bone health as it speeds up the mineralisation of bones.
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,
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practice can add up the variety in the world of fruits , vegetables,
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and so on.
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, a few masses suggest that we should not play with the interior structure as a natural product as it is risky.
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, manipulating the genetic structure can lead to
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of the original species. For instance, Denmark is using a new type of grapes which is genetically a combination of grapes and apples. Surprisingly, they are sweeter and larger than the normal ones.
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, the original grapes have disappeared from there.
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,
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is not a major issue because
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are not changed completely with genetic modification and they hold the same traditional value as the original ones.
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genetically tailored
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cause vanishment of the old traditional
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,
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practice gives numerous new ranges of species and has more health benefits than before.
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, I consider it a great development.
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Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should be more developed, providing clearer summaries of the two viewpoints and the writer's opinion. The link between ideas within paragraphs could be strengthened to improve the logical flow of the essay.
Task Achievement
The response provides a basic discussion of both views, but more depth and analysis is needed to fully address the task. More nuanced discussion of the potential benefits and dangers of genetically modified crops is required.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • genetically modified crops
  • positive development
  • potentially dangerous
  • increased food production
  • improved nutrition
  • reduction in the use of
  • pesticides
  • herbicides
  • enhanced crop resistance
  • pests
  • diseases
  • drought-resistant crops
  • potential environmental harm
  • unknown long-term effects
  • human health
  • cross-contamination
  • non-GMO crops
  • balanced approach
  • careful monitoring
  • regulation
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