The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the
percentage
of macronutrients in the average diet
, the healthy diet
and the healthy diet
for sport
.
Overall
, the
Correct article usage
apply
carbohydrates
is
the highest Change the verb form
are
percentage
in both healthy diets. While
the fat proportion is the lowest among the protein and carbohydrates
percentages in all provided diets. Change the noun form
carbohydrate
Additionally
, in the average diet
both Add a comma
diet,
carbohydrates
and protien
have the same Correct your spelling
protein
percentage
.
The carbohydrates
is
the highest proportion in the healthy Change the verb form
are
diet
and the healthy diet
for sport
with 50% and 60% respectively. In the same two healthy diets
the protein Add a comma
diets,
percentage
is higher in the general healthy diet
with
30% Change preposition
at
while
25% for the Correct word choice
and
sport
. Moreover
, the fat percentage
in the healthy diet
for sport
is lower than the general healthy diet
with 15% and 20% respectively.
In the average diet
, the only diet
that have
both Change the verb form
has
protien
and Correct your spelling
protein
carbohydrates
share
the same proportion Correct subject-verb agreement
shares
with
40% each. Change preposition
of
However
, the remaining percentage
is fat with 20%.Submitted by ibrakh80 on
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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