The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the
percentage
of macronutrients in the average
diet
, the healthy
diet
and the healthy
diet
for
sport
.
Overall
,
the
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carbohydrates
is
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are
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the highest
percentage
in both healthy diets.
While
the fat proportion is the lowest among the protein and
carbohydrates
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carbohydrate
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percentages in all provided diets.
Additionally
, in the average
diet
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diet,
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both
carbohydrates
and
protien
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protein
have the same
percentage
. The
carbohydrates
is
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are
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the highest proportion in the healthy
diet
and the healthy
diet
for
sport
with 50% and 60% respectively. In the same two healthy
diets
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diets,
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the protein
percentage
is higher in the general healthy
diet
with
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at
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30%
while
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and
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25% for the
sport
.
Moreover
, the fat
percentage
in the healthy
diet
for
sport
is lower than the general healthy
diet
with 15% and 20% respectively. In the average
diet
, the only
diet
that
have
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both
protien
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protein
and
carbohydrates
share
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shares
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the same proportion
with
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of
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40% each.
However
, the remaining
percentage
is fat with 20%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, diet, sport, carbohydrates with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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