The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweeden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweeden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The graph presents the average carbon dioxide emissions per individual in four different countries in each ten years from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, Both
United
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the United
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Kingdom and Sweden
are
Verb problem
have
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the highest
in
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apply
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carbon dioxide emissions.
Additionally
, the two
country
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countries
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showed a significant decrease.
On the other hand
, Italy and Portugal were the lowest in carbon dioxide emissions but they started to increase. In Sweden, they reached the peak with more than 10
tones
per
person
,
then
it showed the most enormous decrease to end up with less than 6
tones
per
person
.
Moreover
,
United
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the United
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Kingdom showed a gradual decline, they started with around 11
tones
per individual and
they end
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ended
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up with approximately 9
tones
per individual.
However
, the
tones
per
person
increased in Italy and Portugal. Portugal started with the lowest
tones
among all countries with less than two and
then
increased rapidly to almost 6 per
person
. Italy began with almost 4 per
person
and
growed
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grew
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to be almost 8 per
person
.
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