The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information on the proportion of the people of 4 Asian nations who
habit
the cities between 1970 and 2020, and with forecast data from 2030 to 2040.
Verb problem
inhabited
Overall
, in
the beginning of the Change the preposition
at
period
the most habitat city in the given examples was the Add a comma
period,
Philippines
, while
the percentage
of Indonesia was the lowest. However
, according to
the prediction, Malaysia
will peak among the other countries in 2040, whereas
Thailand will be the lowest.
In 1970 Malaysia
and the Philippines
had approximately the same percentage
, which was about under a third. Although
,
Remove the comma
apply
Malaysia
experienced gradual
rise for the following two Correct article usage
a gradual
years
, anyway
the Rephrase
apply
Philippines
remained as
the highest proportion at approximately half in 1990. Change preposition
in
Nevertheless
, Malaysia
shot up dramatically that year having the highest percentage
over the next years
and its population will climb by more than 80% in the future. In 1990 the Philippines
started decreasing slightly, also
this
country will not be the
top again reaching just over a half in 2040.
Change preposition
at the
In
the bottom of the list were Thailand and Indonesia. These countries’ Change preposition
At
population
increased considerably and there was Fix the agreement mistake
populations
20
% rise in 2000. From that year Indonesia’s Correct article usage
a 20
percentage
started increasing dramatically over the next years
. It will continue growing and reach its peak at 60% in 2040. Thailand’s population remained stable from 2000 to 2020, and it will shot
up in the future Wrong verb form
shoot
years
achieving approximately 50%.Submitted by kama.star.00 on
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