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Some children have serious weight problems. What are the possible solutions?

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In today’s world, since information exchange runs out quickly, including human consumption, it gives people so many options to be consumed.
This
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 phenomenon not only appears in adults but
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 in
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, which makes some of them overweight. As mature people, we should persuade them to more healthy food and ask them for more physical activities or exercises. One of the most important steps to handle
this
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 is eating food in balance, which means rather than obese
children
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 consuming junk food with high sugar and salt, they need vegetables and fruits as mineral sources for their bodies. So, their digestive system can ingest and absorb nutrition maximally.
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, an 8-year-old child in the USA, who had a 60 kg
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 weight, changed her meals
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 mother with a lot of broccoli, cucumbers, tomatoes, and so on. In a year, she has around 20 kg of
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 loss.
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, another solution is to do some exercises. It doesn’t mean that they always run or go to the gym every day,
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, it can be replaced with simple activities which burn calories and involve their
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 as playing hide and seek, jumping on a trampoline, or playing with their pet.
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, an elementary school in the UK has a physical games section every morning for their students. In a month, obese
children
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 lose 3 kg of
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 weight on average. In conclusion,
children
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 with weight problems can have decreasing
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 mass if we as adults create a healthy environment for them, namely preparing vegetables and fruits
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 carbohydrate-only foods, and doing many activities that make their bodies move.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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