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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own countries. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and the disadvantages of this development?

#students #university #study #countries #opportunities #development
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In the past, not every person had a chance to study at a university, it was
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 a blessing to be true.
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, it was not easy to study abroad because of the rareness of transportation. in
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 century, it is possible to go anywhere in an hour.
The distance
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 does not matter anymore because we can use many transportation modes in
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 era
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 as planes, buses, and trains. we can see
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the goods
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goods
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 and
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bad
 from the development of
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 situation. the good one is about the privilege that scholars can get from
study
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 abroad. the culture and language differences can help them to enhance their social capability. they will be able to blend with other social groups even if their situation is not in common. not only can get a new experience at a young age but the student will
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 make new friends as well. even though there are so many advantages, there is still a disadvantage that they have to
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. they have a lack of time with their own family, which can degrade the quality of relationships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • exposure
  • perspectives
  • academic
  • career
  • personal growth
  • development
  • language proficiency
  • communication skills
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • costs
  • financial burden
  • homesickness
  • loneliness
  • cultural barriers
  • language barriers
  • adjustment difficulties
  • safety concerns
  • unfamiliar environment
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