Some people say that school studies are not useful and most important things are learnt outside the school. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples.
It is true that
school
studies
are useful
Correct quantifier usage
more useful
that
learning outside the Correct word choice
than
school
.While
some people
tend towards the viewpoint that learning outside the school
is most important.I would like to support the idea that school
learning is more important than outside the school
.
On one side, it is understandable for some people
to believe that learning outside the school
is better than learning in school
.One of the main reasons is that people
think that school
learning is the basis of education.This
means that school
studies
only teach student
knowledge but not how to live in reality.Fix the agreement mistake
students
School
studies
only for academics but not common
sense of life.When Add an article
the common
students
grow up they will find that they are hard to join the society.For example
, if students
learn some comics and magazines can inspire them
ideas Change the pronoun
their
become
more funny and interesting Fix the infinitive
to become
people
.
On the other hand
, it is more convincing to me that school
studies
is
Change the verb form
are
important
than learning outside.Correct quantifier usage
more important
Firstly
, I think that when school
time students
just need to know to be a student
,they need to focus on their study
.Fix the agreement mistake
studies
This
is because,during this
period the student
is innocent, if they too early touch the outside world too, it may easily make the student
go the wrong way.Secondly
,the fact that various reading materials also
deserve our attention.In other words
, it is hard to control what students
read outside.Nowadays, a lot of unhealthy books or videos try to Infiltrate the student
so school
is the only way to make sure the student
studies
.
In conclusion, although
some people
think that learning outside is better than school
. It seems to me that school
studies
are useful.Submitted by ggrunrunderr on
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