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Revenue Sources and Expenditures of a USA Charity in one year

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The pie charts illustrate how much a charitable organization for children in the USA spent and received in 2006.
Overall
, it is evident that the revenue of children’s charity mainly came from donated food
while
 the expenditure for program service constituted the most. The investment income and government grants gave
this
 organization very little. Donated food contributed the majority to revenue sources of the children’s charity was 86,6%, which ranked
first,
followed by 10.4% of the community contribution, quite far compared to the donated food.
In contrast
, 0.4% and 2.2% were the amount of money, received from program Povonuo and other income.
However
, the figures from investment income and government shared a similar and smallest, with only 0.2%. The most of expenditures were for program services, which made up 95.8%
whereas
 the amount of fundraising was 2.6% and the figure for management and general was lower than
this
 by 1%, which was 1.6%.
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