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Today many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problem does this cause? What can be sone to solve this?

#people #neighbours #cities #sone
Nowadays, there are vast
numer
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numbers
 of
city
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a city
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 dweller who
do
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 not know who their neighbours
is
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are
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 in the same neighbourhood
as a consequence
 of lacking
of
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apply
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communication between them.
Though
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this
 circumstance can be tackled by improving the
people
's
comunicative
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communicative
communication
 skills and
relationship
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. The main factor of
this
 problem
is
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came from the lack of communication of the city's inhabitants.
This
 is the result of the feeling that their
neighbour
 is distrustful, which
make
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 them
became
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 alert and avoid
to communicate
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communicating
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 with
the
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unknown
people
.
Moreover
, it is
some time
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 very sensitive that they might hear about their nearby's background, their
nextdoor
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next door
neighbour
 might
got
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get
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 into a sue, or some serious crime, which
make
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makes
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 the
distant
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distance
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 between them become longer and longer
for instance
.
This
 circumstance can be tackled by improving the resident's social skills and friendship of them with their
neighbour
.
People
 should be encouraged to
be come
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become
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 confidence and friendly with other
people
 who live in the same
neigbourhood
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neighbourhood
.
For example
, the residents should actively try to talk with their
neighbour
, or invite them to a party, a
heart warming
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 meal, they
also
 should frequently keep in touch with their
neighbour
, too .
To conclude
, there are
vast
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numer
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number
 of
city
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a city
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 dweller who
do
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does
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 not know who their neighbours
is
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are
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 in the same neighbourhood
as a result
 of lacking
of
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apply
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communication, but
this
 can
be solve
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be solved
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 by upgrading the friendship of the residents with their
neighbour
.
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