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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. what problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities
In the modern decades, many authorities living in urban areas do not realize
people
 in their neighbourhood.
This
 issue has resulted in not meeting with each other in the same area and not updating the
information
 of their neighbour to the the-state-of-the-art and it can be alleviated by helping and keeping contact with them. On the one hand, these problems come from actions which do not meet with each other inhabitants because they do not have enough time to see them or they just keep themselves in secret. So that,
people
 would not recognise who is that or they will think it is a new person who comes there to inhabit.
For example
,
people
 in some urban areas work all day and
not
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 greet their neighbourhoods so when they go somewhere in their neighbourhood they will not know who they are.
Moreover
,
this
 issue resulted
by
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from
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 not getting
information
in
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about
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 where they live because the amount of time in working is busy in some places which urbanized.
Due to
 that
reasons
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, the
inviduals
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individuals
inhabit
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who inhabit
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 their places do not know about the new member of their neighbour. Takes Vietnam as an
eample
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example
,
people
lived
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 in Ho Chi Minh
city
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City
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 which
near
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is near
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 the place of
main
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economy
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country
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the country
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.
people
 focus on their work and not
up-to-date
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on up-to-date
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the
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apply
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information
 about
their
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the
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 areas where they live. In conclusion,
this
 problem can come from many aspects
such
 as not knowing or not updating the
information
 about where they live but we could meet and help them to create a good relationship.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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