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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. what problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities
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In the modern decades, many authorities living in urban areas do not realize
people
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 in their neighbourhood.
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 issue has resulted in not meeting with each other in the same area and not updating the
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 of their neighbour to the the-state-of-the-art and it can be alleviated by helping and keeping contact with them. On the one hand, these problems come from actions which do not meet with each other inhabitants because they do not have enough time to see them or they just keep themselves in secret. So that,
people
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 would not recognise who is that or they will think it is a new person who comes there to inhabit.
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,
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 in some urban areas work all day and
not
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 greet their neighbourhoods so when they go somewhere in their neighbourhood they will not know who they are.
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,
this
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 issue resulted
by
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 not getting
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in
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 where they live because the amount of time in working is busy in some places which urbanized.
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 that
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, the
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individuals
inhabit
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 their places do not know about the new member of their neighbour. Takes Vietnam as an
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example
,
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lived
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 in Ho Chi Minh
city
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 which
near
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 the place of
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economy
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country
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.
people
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 focus on their work and not
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on up-to-date
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the
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apply
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information
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 about
their
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 areas where they live. In conclusion,
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 problem can come from many aspects
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 as not knowing or not updating the
information
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 about where they live but we could meet and help them to create a good relationship.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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