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Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities what problem does this cause? what can be done about it?

#people #neighbors #cities
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There can be little doubt that the
relationship
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 between neighbourhoods in many cities is very low.
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 problem is attributable to
people
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's altitude with their neighbours and the improvement of the
internet
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 but can be addressed by hanging out together and limiting the
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use
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 equipment. The underlying root of the problem is
people
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's
behavior
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with
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toward
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neighbors
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. Despite near houses, the regrettable reality is that many
people
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 spend
time
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 in their houses and do not say hello or face-to-face with their friends
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.
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 situation stems from their bad
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 toward
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neighbors
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, they think it is not necessary to invite
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neighbors
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 to hang out or visit them with some presents.
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, there are many
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 who do not know about their nearby house friends
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 live next to their houses.
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 is true in Vietnam, where most
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 spend their
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 with family and work so the
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 with their neighbour is probably lower than in other countries. Another factor may be the improvement of the
internet
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 nowadays.
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, today's young
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 usually spend their
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 on the
internet
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 which means a lack of face-to-face interaction with their
neighbors
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.
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, many
people
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 do not meet their
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neighbors
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 because spend
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 on
internet
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 equipment, like computers, mobile phones and other services. In the UK, young children rarely face-to-face with their
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neighbors
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 because of the
internet
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 increase. Perhaps a solution to the problem of knowledge about
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neighbors
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 is to be found in the form of meeting and helping each other to make a good
relationship
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 with them.
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 solution can help
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people in
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people's
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neighbors
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 know who are you and where your house is so that they can help you in some situations when you need help. In conclusion, these problems can come from many aspects
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 as not knowing or greeting each other but we could meet and help them to create a good
relationship
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 with them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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