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Today many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problem does this cause? What can be sone to solve this?

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Nowadays, there are vast
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 of city dwellers who do not know who their neighbours are in the same neighbourhood
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 of communication between them.
This
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 circumstance can be tackled by improving the
people
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's communicative skills and relationships. The main factor of
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 problem
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came from the lack of communication of the city's inhabitants.
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 is the result of the feeling that their
neighbour
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 is distrustful, which makes them become alert and avoid communicating with
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 unknown
people
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.
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, it is sometimes very sensitive that they might hear about their nearby's background, their next door
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 might be got into a sue, or some serious crime, which makes the distance between them become longer and longer
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.
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 circumstance can be tackled by improving the resident's social skills and friendship of them with their
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.
People
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 should be encouraged to become
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 and friendly with other
people
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 who live in the same neighbourhood.
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, the residents should actively try to talk with their
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neighbour
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, or invite them to a party,
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heartwarming meal, they
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 should frequently keep in touch with their
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neighbour
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neighbours
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, too .
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, there are a vast number of city
dweller
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dwellers
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 who do not know who their neighbours are in the same neighbourhood
as a result
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 of
lacking
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a lack
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 of communication, but
this
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 can be solved by upgrading the friendship of the residents with their
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neighbour
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neighbours
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.

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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is inconsistent and lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The main points lack sufficient support and development.
task achievement
The essay partially addresses the prompt by discussing the problem of not knowing neighbors in large cities and providing a solution. However, the response lacks depth and comprehensive ideas, and the specific examples provided are not fully relevant to the topic.
lexical resource
The lexical resource used is somewhat limited and lacks variety. There are also instances of awkward phrasing and word choice.
grammatical range
The grammatical range is limited, with frequent errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and word form.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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